六级高分作文_幸福源于内心
幸福源于内心
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the source of happiness by commenting on the remark, “Happiness is not determined by what’s happening around you, but rather what’s happening inside you. Most people depend on others to gain happiness, but the truth is, it always comes from within .” You can cite examples to illustrate your point. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
审题立意
1. 导语解读：要求考生从评论题目中引述的话入手，就“幸福的源泉”这一话题展开论述。
2. 文章立意：幸福是人发自内心的感受，因此，幸福来自于内心，而不是来自于外界的力量或受外界的影响。
写作思路
1. 第一段简要解释引言的含义，然后提出论点：幸福源于内心。
2. 第二段通过对比论证的方式阐述真正的幸福源于内心和自己的努力。
3. 第三段呼应开头，再次强调幸福源于自身。
参考范文
“Happiness is not determined by what’s happening around you, but rather what’s happening inside you. Most people depend on others to gain happiness, but the truth is, it always comes from within.” The remark means that happiness comes from within your heart instead of from others or circumstances around you. 1 In my opinion, that’s absolutely true. 2
If you depend on others to attain happiness, you’ll find that you are at a disadvantage and may lose yourself. Genuine happiness doesn’t lie in driving a fancy race car bought by your parents, or living in a well decorated luxury mansion given by your parents, or receving a large amount of wealth inherited from your parents. 3 Instead, genuine happiness comes from your own pursuit of life. If you work hard and try your utmost to earn money, you can drive a luxury car of your own, live in a big house you buy for yourself and do whatever you want to do. All these successes, whether big or small, will make you happy. 3
In a word, happiness comes from yourself, your hard work, your persistence in your dream, and your creation of your beautiful life. 4
“能决定幸福的不是身边发生的事，而是你内心所产生的情绪。大部分人依赖于他人获得幸福，但事实是，幸福总是取决于自身。”这句话的意思是幸福源于内心，而不是源自其他人或者是你身边的各种境况。在我看来，这无疑是正确的。
如果你依赖于他人获得幸福，你会发现自己处于一种不利的境地，而且你或许会迷失自我。真正的幸福不在于开你父母买给你的花哨的跑车，或者是住在父母给你的豪宅里，又或是从父母那里收到一笔数额巨大的遗产。相反，真正的幸福源自于你自身对于生活的追求。如果你努力并竭尽全力地挣钱，你可以开自己买的豪车，住自己买的豪宅，你可以做任何自己想做的事。所有这些成功，无论大小，都能使你感到幸福。
总之，幸福源于自身，源于你的刻苦努力，源于你对梦想的坚持，源于你对美好生活的创造。
范文点评
1. 开篇引入引言并加以解释：幸福源于内心。
2. 首段末句明确表达自己赞成引言所蕴含的观点。
3. 从正反两个方面阐述自己的观点，论据充分，论证有力。
4. 末段总结全文，重申观点。
要点用法
disadvantage n. 缺点；不利条件
lie in 在于
luxury n. 豪华，奢华，奢侈
mansion n. 大厦；宅邸
heritage n. 遗产
genuine adj. 真实的；真正的
persistence n. 坚持不懈；执着
句法点评
1. Genuine happiness doesn’t lie in driving a fancy race car bought by your parents, or living in a well decorated luxury mansion given by your parents, or receving a large amount of wealth inherited from your parents.
此句中用了三个并列的动名词短语driving...or living...or receiving作介词in的宾语，构成排比。
2. All these successes, whether big or small, will make you happy.
句中使用了插入语whether big or small，意为“无论大小”，用在句中可以起到补充说明的作用，同时又赋予了句子节奏感。
