剑13Test3小作文9分范文赏析：quantities of electricity

　　

　　剑桥雅思小作文审题

　　图中20个数据，是不是都要写?

　　我们得定义这个“写”的意思。

　　1) 不用具体把每一个数字都列举出来，但是2) 只选择一些国家来写，或者3) 一些国家只写产电量不写用电量(或者反过来)，都是不行的。

　　所谓不用把每个数据列举出来，是说一些数据可以打包处理——比如给一个区间(考鸭要自己找到上限和下限)。但是，只有接近的数据才能放到一个区间内。

　　如何划分主体段?

　　常见的分段方法是，将数据接近的写到一段。但是，这样就会导致一个主体段特别短(4个数据)，另一个主体段特别长(16个数据)。所以，这个题目例外，建议前五和后五个国家各分一段。这样，对应的2个主体段字数就会差不多。

　　要写的 comparisons 有哪些?

　　comparisons 是考鸭作文特别容易遗漏的信息，接下来会进行逐一列举

　　1) 产电量和用电量最大(特别大)的国家

　　2) 每个国家产电量和用电量的差异，都不大

　　3) 产电量和用电量的差异，只有 Germany 产电少于用电

　　4) Russia 产电量和用电量最接近(考虑写，因为题目信息太多，建议次要信息都不写)

　　剑桥雅思小作文9分范文

　　开头段

　　The bar chart presents data relating to the quantities of electricity (measured in billions of kilowatts per hour) produced and used in 2014 by the ten countries in the world that produce and use the greatest amount of electricity.

　　主体段1：总体的对比

　　It is clear that China and the USA are the biggest producers and users of electricity by far. Except for Germany, all the countries in question produce more electricity than they use, though the differences are generally not large.

　　主体段2：前五个国家的数据

　　China and the USA produced around 5,400 billion kWh and around 4,100 billion kWh of electricity respectively. Further, both nations used only fractionally less than this sum. Russia, Japan and India occupied positions three, four and five in the top ten, with corresponding consumption figures ranging between 1,057 billion and 871 billion with respect to generation and ranging from 1,038 billion to just under 700 billion for usage.

　　主体段3：后五个国家的数据

　　The final five places in the top ten were occupied (in descending order) by Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and the Republic of Korea. The spread of both production and usage figures was approximately 620 billion to around 450 billion. Canada, France and Brazil were notable in that their production quantities were all at least 75 billion higher than their usage figures. In contrast, Germany consumed about 60 billion more than it produced.

　　雅思小作文相关词汇

　　1) fractional：Very small; insignificant fractionally=slightly

　　2) spread：The extent or limit to which something is or can be spread