六级高分作文_珍惜你所拥有的一切
珍惜你所拥有的一切
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on cherishing what you have by referring to Helen Keller’s famous words, “If, by some miracle, I were granted three seeing days, to be followed by a relapse into darkness, I should divide the period into three parts… ” You can cite examples to illustrate your point. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
审题立意
1. 导语解读：要求考生结合海伦•凯勒的名言就“珍惜你所拥有的一切”这一话题进行简述，可以举具体事例来论证自己的观点。
2. 文章立意：世上有很多东西值得珍惜，比如有限的地球资源、身体的健康、我们与家人及朋友的关系等，我们应当努力维护。
写作思路
1. 第一段简要评述海伦•凯勒的名言，然后引出要讨论的主题：珍惜所拥有的一切。
2. 第二段通过举例的方式阐述自己所珍惜的东西，并说明原因：因为地球是人们赖以生存的地方，所以不能随意破坏；因为健康是首要财富，所以要保重身体；因为亲朋是生活中的指路人，所以要珍惜。
3. 第三段呼应文章主题，再次强调人们应珍惜所拥有的一切。
参考范文
It is well acknowledged that Helen Keller, blind and deaf but firm in spirit, has greatly influenced generations of people with her book titled Three Days to See . Till now, her famous words, “If, by some miracle, I were granted three seeing days...”, have been echoing through my minds. 1 So what I am trying to emphasize is cherishing what you have at the moment. 2
In the first place 3 , we should treasure the planet we are living in. We would be ruined by ourselves if we never took any action on pollution, deforestation, energy consumption, and global warming that pose threat to our planet. In the second place 3 , we need to take good care of ourselves. A famous American thinker called Emerson once said, “The first wealth is health.” For many, however, health is not valued until sickness strikes. In the third place 3 , we ought to value our family and friends. “Sometimes our hearts get tangled and our souls a little off-kilter, friends and family can set us right and help guide us back to the light. ”
Thus, it’s high time we cherished what we have right now and strived for a bright future by sparing no efforts to protect the planet, health, family and friends since we cannot live without them. 4
众所周知，身残志坚的海伦•凯勒曾以她的《假如给我三天光明》一书深刻影响了几代人。直到现在，她的名言“如果因为某种奇迹，我获得了能看见东西的三天……”依然回荡在我的耳畔。所以我想要强调的就是，请珍惜我们所拥有的一切。
首先，我们要珍视我们赖以生存的星球。如果不采取任何措施处理污染、滥伐、能源损耗和全球变暖这些正在威胁着我们的星球的问题，我们将自取灭亡。其二，我们要保重自己的身体。美国著名的思想家爱默生曾经说过：“健康是首要的财富。”然而，对于许多人而言，只有当疾病来袭他们才重视健康。其三，我们要珍惜我们的家人和朋友。因为“有时我们的内心会纠结并且慌乱失措，朋友和家人会给我们指引，使我们不再茫然。”
因此，该是我们珍惜现在所拥有的一切，为光明的未来努力奋斗的时候了。我们应不遗余力地保护地球、保重身体、维护家人和朋友，因为我们离不开这一切。
范文点评
1. 开篇引入海伦•凯勒的名作及名言。
2. 首段末句明确表达自己的态度：应珍惜所拥有的一切。
3. 分三个层次论证自己的观点，并结合具体事例加以论证。
4. 末段总结全文，重申观点。
要点用法
echo v. 回荡，回响
treasure v. 珍惜
ruin v. 毁灭
take action 采取行动
deforestation n. 采伐森林
consumption n. 消耗
threat n. 威胁
tangle v. 纠缠
off-kilter adj. 失去平衡的
strive for 努力获取，力争
spare no effort 不遗余力
句法点评
1. It is well acknowledged that Helen Keller, blind and deaf but firm in spirit, has greatly influenced generations of people with her book titled Three Days to See .
这句话中it为形式主语，真正的主语是that引导的主语从句，该句型意为“众所周知，普遍认为……”，还可以表达为it is universally/acknowledged that..., it is well-known that...等。
2. For many, however, health is not valued until sickness strikes.
本句属于 not...until...句型，表示“直到……才……”，有强调的意味。强烈的语言色彩易给读者留下深刻的印象。
