六级高分作文_成功需要付出努力
成功需要付出努力
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the importance of making efforts by commenting on Thomas Hardy’s remark, “I might say that success is won by three things: first, effort; second, more effort; third, still more effort .” You can cite examples to illustrate your point. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
审题立意
1. 导语解读：要求考生根据引语的内容就“成功需要付出努力”这一话题展开论述。
2. 文章立意：成功是人们经过不断的努力、艰辛的付出后所得到的回报。因此，成功只有靠不断的努力去获得。
写作思路
1. 第一段引入哈代的名言，简要解释后提出论点：成功需要付出努力。
2. 第二段用对比论证的方式阐述努力和不努力的两种后果，揭示只有努力才能取得成功。
3. 第三段具体阐述个人对努力的看法，再次强调成功需要付出努力。
参考范文
Thomas Hardy once said, “I might say that success is won by three things: first, effort; second, more effort; third, still more effort.” 1 It reveals that the only way to achieve success is to spare no effort. 2 I absolutely agree with it. 3
Everyone tries to achieve success. But some finally make it while others fail. 4 There is no doubt that those who stick to the end through a long period of hard struggles attain their aims while those who are not willing to make more industrious efforts stop halfway and thus cannot achieve success. 4
From my perspective, efforts mean hardwork with more perseverance. 5 Heaven rewards the diligent. We all know “no pains, no gains.” There is no royal road to the summit of success. Without exerting oneself, it is impossible to succeed. Making persistent efforts is like laying bricks one next to another. Only by working with whole-hearted devotion and perseverance can we attain success. Thus, hardwork with more perseverance is the deciding factor to one’s success. 5
托马斯•哈代曾经说过：“我会说成功要靠三件事才能赢得：努力，努力，再努力。” 它告诉我们成功的唯一方式就是全力以赴。我完全同意这一观点。
人人都试图获得成功。不过，一些人最后成功了，而一些人则失败了。毫无疑问，那些坚持自己梦想并经过长期努力奋斗撑到最后的人实现了他们的梦想，而那些不愿意勤奋努力的人只会半途而废，因此无法取得成功。
我认为，努力就是刻苦和更多的毅力。天道酬勤。我们都知道“没有付出就没有收获”。通向成功巅峰的路没有容易的。不努力是不可能成功的。持续的努力就像一块接一块地搭砖。只有全身心的努力和毅力，我们才能获得成功。因此，努力工作和更多的毅力是通向成功的决定性因素。
范文点评
1. 开篇引用引语，意在引出本文话题。
2. 揭示引语的寓意，即文章的中心思想：成功的唯一方式就是全力以赴。
3. 首段末句明确表明自己赞同上述观点。
4. 对比论证观点：努力的人才会成功，反之就会失败。
5. 给出个人对努力的理解并加以详细阐述。
要点用法
spare no effort 不遗余力
stick to 坚持
attain v. 实现；获得
industrious adj. 勤勉的
stop halfway 半途而废
summit n. 顶点
royal road 捷径；坦途
exerting oneself 努力；尽力
whole-hearted 全心全意的
deciding factor 决定性因素
句法点评
1. There is no doubt that those who stick to the end through a long period of hard struggles attain their aims while those who are not willing to make more industrious efforts stop halfway and thus cannot achieve success.
此处采用了固定句型：There is no doubt that...，意为“毫无疑问，……”，其中that引导同位语从句，后面的those who...while those who...是并列的对比结构，正反对比说明了努力付出和不愿付出的结果，其中who均引导定语从句。
2. Heaven rewards the diligent.
该句对应的中文是“天道酬勤”，平时应多注意中文成语的常见译法。
