六级高分作文_自助者天助之
自助者天助之
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on self help by referring to the saying “God helps those who help themselves .” You can cite examples to illustrate your point. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
审题立意
1. 导语解读：要求考生根据谚语“自助者天助之”，针对“自助”这一话题写一篇作文，可以举例证明论点。
2. 文章立意：人遇到困难时首先要学会自助，如果自己都没有战胜困难的信心，其他人再怎么帮你也无济于事。
写作思路
1. 第一段开门见山提出论点：人遇到困难时首先要学会自助，如果自己都没有战胜困难的信心，其他人再怎么帮你也无济于事。并引入谚语，初步论证。
2. 第二段通过举例进一步论证自己的观点。
3. 第三段呼应主题，指出只有那些自助的人才能最终获得成功。
参考范文
People should learn to help themselves when they meet difficulties. If they themselves have no confidence in conquering difficulties, whatever help others may give is of no use. 1 Just as the saying goes “God helps those who help themselves.” 2
A tramp asked Napoleon Hill for help by telling the misfortune of his factory’s going bankrupt, his separation from his family and his thoughts of extricating himself by committing suicide. Hill looked up and down at the tramp who was ragged, unshaven and smelly and took him to the front of the mirror. Hill pointed to the image of the tramp in the mirror and asked, “Do you know the person in the mirror? He is the only person that can help you.” A few days later, Hill met the tramp again on the street. But this time, the tramp was well-dressed, brisk, and confident. 3 The story told us that you are the very person that can help yourself most. 4
In summary, self help provides people an opportunity to anneal the mind and improve their ability. Only those who can overcome all the difficulties by themselves can be a master of life. 5
人遇到困难时要学会自助，如果自己都没有战胜困难的信心，其他人再怎么帮你也无济于事。正如那句谚语所说：“自助者天助之。”
有个流浪汉向（美国作家）拿破仑•希尔讲述了自己工厂破产、妻离子散、一度想要以自杀解脱的悲惨境遇以寻求帮助。希尔上下打量了一番面前这个衣衫褴褛、满脸胡子、浑身散发着恶臭的流浪汉，然后将他带到镜子前，指着镜子说：“你认识镜子里这个人吗？只有这个人能帮你。”几天后，希尔又在街上遇见此流浪汉，不过此时他已衣着光鲜、步履轻快、信心满满。这个故事告诉我们“这个世界上最能够帮助你的人就是你自己”。
总而言之，自助能够使人获得磨炼意志及提升能力的机会，只有那些靠自身克服困难的人才能成为生活的掌舵手。
范文点评
1. 开门见山提出论点，简洁明了。
2. 引用谚语，对论点进行初步论证。
3. 通过举例，进一步证明主题并加深人们的认识。
4. 故事末尾的总结性话语使论证更加有力。
5. 结尾段呼应首段，重申主题思想。
要点用法
tramp n. 流浪汉
misery n. 痛苦
extricate v. 使解脱
commit suicide 自杀
look up and down 上下打量
ragged adj. 衣衫褴褛的
unshaven adj. 未剃须的
smelly adj. 有臭味的，发臭的
well-dressed adj. 衣着讲究的
brisk adj. 轻快的，精神饱满的
anneal v. 锻炼，磨炼
句法点评
1. If they themselves have no confidence in conquering difficulties, whatever help others may give is of no use.
本句是包含条件状语从句的复合句。主句采用了be of接抽象名词来说明句子的主语所具有的性质或特征。在这类抽象名词前我们可用一些形容词修饰，用以说明程度。
2. Just as the saying goes “God helps those who help themselves.”
这个句式在引用谚语时常用，表示“正如一句谚语所说……”。
